Thread: Outlaw Star: The Before Years (My First Fanfic)

I hope you like this, I spent some months working on my very first book.

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Outlaw Star: The Before Years

Gene and his friends lived on Centinel for long times. But Gene thought it was now time. No time like the present.
For a long time he waited and waited but had no spaceship to make his dreams come to life.
He drinked his troubles away and talked to Clive most nights but it was no longer good enough.
The next day Gene lamented and had hart to hart with Melfeena about the times of his youth.

"As a boy, I work hard to become spaceman, and I almost did it. But dad was kill", sad Gene.
"I am truely sorry for your lots," Melfeena explanationed.
Gene gotted his cast gun and tapped the trigger. The gun made a smocky green ring and shotted long energy beam. The beam was powerfull, but Hazanko was not hurted.
"Ha ha ha. You are a small man," smiled Hazanko. "I will now defeat you at this time."
"Pagwa Sonfer", said Hazanko at the top of his robot voice as he held arm out. He looked at Jean, and starred into his eyes.
Gene wanted to fight, but it was sadly too late to kill.
"You will not hurt my fiend," James exclaims as he jump in front of Hazanko.
If Gene would of been strong in the mind, James would be safe but Jim was fried.
He grabbed Melfeena, Aisha and Suzoka, they flewed the Outlaw Star into space.

Cya Again

Beautiful. Masterful. Brilliant. This story was so packed with meaning, depth and artistry that it would make the likes of John Steinbeck, Oscar Wilde and F. Scott Fitzgerald weep. This story is the deepest thing since deep drove into deeptown to stop at McDeepalds through the deepthrough to order a deepburger with a side order of deepfries. We need to preserve this story so that way, when mankind ends and an alien civilization were to come to earth, they too can discover this masterpiece.

I feeled a lot of feelings at this story. Im lookign forward to your next storys as well I hope you do a lot of them? My favorite part was when Hzzananko shot at Games but Jim protecdted him! Wow! I did nt see that one comming! I creid near the end part (at the last part of the sorty). My mom says it was easy to cry @ this story beaucause of the hourmones I'm taking. Can yuor next story and fan writing / story / fanfiction have more Malfina & Suzo in it? Thay're my best 2 characters but I also really like Fried and Jene and Isha and Zelda. When this story got 2 its sad part it made me thenk of Kingdom Harts.

I am delighted that you enjoyed my literature. I put my all into it when I found the time to work on it. It felt like ages! If I were to convert the time spent to nanoseconds, it would be hundreds of billions! Specifically, 300000000000. Yes, perhaps I will release another short story when I am high as a kite on Sunday. I have talked to my friends in the Fanfiction communion. The author SorasWife420 has acted as my editor. But indeed, the next one should whet your appetite, Zemekis. As a teaser, it will tell the story of how Suzoku and her father Hitoriga had a falling out! Stay tuned oatlaws!

This is very very epic!

I haven't read a story that engaging and emotionally compelling since Operation Meteor's epic Wing/SEED crossover romance between Heero and Murrue.